Overall your paper had a lot of good information and was formatted correctly. One thing you could improve on is your sentence structure. I made notes throughout your paper, but some of the sentences were just worded weird making it difficult to read what you were trying to say. You also had a few run-on sentences. Make sure you're including commas or starting new sentences when needed. You used many quotes and had good references/in-text citations. Also you use a lot of the same words maybe try to switch up your vocabulary. Overall great job!:)
Really great structure overall! There were a couple grammatical errors I made note of. Also I noticed that there were a few run on sentences. Try to shorten them or break in down into two sentences so it won't be too much! Really liked the examples and quotes you used in the paper, it made it more interesting as well to see your explanation of the quote. Conclusion was great and wrapped the paper up very well!!
Overall your paper had a lot of good information and was formatted correctly. One thing you could improve on is your sentence structure. I made notes throughout your paper, but some of the sentences were just worded weird making it difficult to read what you were trying to say. You also had a few run-on sentences. Make sure you're including commas or starting new sentences when needed. You used many quotes and had good references/in-text citations. Also you use a lot of the same words maybe try to switch up your vocabulary. Overall great job!:)
ReplyDeleteReally great structure overall! There were a couple grammatical errors I made note of. Also I noticed that there were a few run on sentences. Try to shorten them or break in down into two sentences so it won't be too much! Really liked the examples and quotes you used in the paper, it made it more interesting as well to see your explanation of the quote. Conclusion was great and wrapped the paper up very well!!
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